…ok, so we fixed 47… and additionally <hem,haw> I also altered the script just a little. So this is either an insight into the writing process, or you can look at this as a total mess up by me. Either way, I hope you enjoy it. Consider it… a director’s cut!
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I like Scooziecat’s lines better the first way. His line in the second panel flows better without the added sentence, keeping the focus on the problem at hand; besides, the point of the aside is already communicated by the use of “somehow” (and more efficiently, too). Also, his last line sounds more natural to me before the alteration. Not entirely sure why, but there it is.
“‘Accidentally’” adds something, though.
great notes, wtd.
I wonder how this will end up. Honestly tho, I would pick Charlie over Hunter any day! Red heads are hot :: insert carpet/drape joke::
I love this comic <3
“TACKLE HIM!”
I laughed my butt off.
I don’t understand what the fuss is about. I can only wish guys would talk about how good I look naked.
Diana Falzone was the best thing on maxium radio
=\ The fuss is about rumors. Once they start they soon spiral out of control and next thing you know your the school slut. If your lucky they get bored and it dies down… if not you get a really gross nickname and all the guys dumb enough to believe it try to date rape you. Even if best case scenario it dies down there will still be people who remember.
So yeah it can be really bad.
ah…the clean version without the outlines… still, the awesomeness doesn’t change
so i read through it and i really like the story. the whole different parts of her thought process is a really good story telling device. They each have their separate voice and they all add up to anna’s overall character.
the only thing i’d recommend is that it seems like the art is a bunch of copy and paste. more expression in anna’s face or something, it was really noticeable a few pages back.
Hi Bluh BB… thanks for reading through!